Hello HERvoice, I happened on your finally breathing at Read and Review.

First Impression Intriguing title. Very small poem, looks quick and easy to read and review.

Form Free Verse in 6 lines.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics This reads fluidly. The space before L6 creates drama. L6 is a surprise.

SuggestionsI see no technical problems with this poem. This is just my opinion but I wanted just a little bit more.

Overall I thought this very short, simple poem is effective. It touched me.
Well written. I enjoyed reading your poem.

~~Tink



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