Hello Gervic, I'm here from Read and Review to review your Would We Feel?

First Impression I thought title a little curious. My thought, Would we feel what? The colored font, the poem centered on the page, I thought attractive.

Form Two sixains made up of 3 rhymed couplets each and followed by a declamatory, rhymed couplet. The lines have no apparent metric or syllabic pattern. The 14 lines, rhyme scheme, and the question, answer pattern is reminiscent of a Couplet Sonnet. Though the traditional Couplets Sonnet is written in iambic pentameter with breaks between couplets or no stanza breaks.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics The poem reads out loud fluidly even without a metric pattern. Interesting words: scream, mirthful, essence. Texture in questions asked and the answer coming in the last couplet.

Suggestions I saw not technical problems. If it were mine, and I had the time, I would probably try to stick more closely to the Couplet Sonnet elements and convert the lines to iambic pentameter removing any stanza breaks other than to break before the last couplet. But it is 3 years old and it isn't mine. I am just thinking out loud, it is your poem, use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.

Overview I thought this poem thought provoking and well written. I enjoyed the read.

~~Tink

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