Hello Dr M C, I am here to read and review your

COME TO STAY  (E) Memories etched in heart. #1421684 by Dr M C Gupta

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Title and appearance on the page. The invitation in the title is enticing and would lure me in to read. The piece appears organized.

FormWritten in 7 quatrains, with lines predominantly syllabic, alternating 7 and 6 syllables each and variant rhyme, xaxa xbxb xcxc etc. with x being unrhymed.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, sonics The alternating syllable length and rhyme add texture to the piece. In some places the syntax is surprisingly awkward which leads me to think that maybe English is not a first language or the words are switched around to afford the syllabic and or rhyme patterns.

SuggestionsThe word image is used 5 times but the varying placement in each stanza doesn't have the power of the device of repetition. I know this is an old poem and I'm sure you have moved on but I think this piece would be stronger if you either attempt to create a closer pattern or find substitute words. This is your poem, this is just showing you your poem though another's eyes. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.

What I likedThis was a sweetly sad piece which conveyed an emotion to me.

I did enjoy this read.

~~Tink

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