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 The Roosters are Fighting  [E]
The roosters are fighting
by solitary
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Solitary!
This is a nice tribute to a chicken you obviously liked a lot, provided this is a true story), and I like the way you told it. Your descriptions of Black Ayam were great, and even though he probably could never match up to True Blue, he still 'tried his luck' with the ladies when he had a chance.
But now with True Blue gone, it looks like he's going to be the cock of the walk, so to speak, which is likely why he's crowing up a storm!
Can't say I've ever read a tribute to a chicken before, but like I said, you did a good job with it.
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot one tiny niggle:
'...caught out in the cold loosing toes ' (losing)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Solitary! It was a pleasure to read, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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