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Greetings again, Shade!
This is a really nice, heartwarming holiday story. You did a good job of showing how children can overcome practically anything, and taking on the task of making this a good Christmas by themselves (and secretly, at that) was a great plot idea. I like how the children made those ‘presents’ out of the simplest of things: dried flower petals, rocks, and whatnot. That shows the real meaning of Christmas; that’s it’s the thought that counts!
I also enjoyed the part about that poor sapling they used for the Christmas tree. It reminded me of the one Charlie Brown got in A Charlie Brown Christmas.
Great spelling and grammar, but I did spot a couple of tiny niggles (sorry to be so picky, but it’s a pet peeve of mine):
“That’s okay(,) Mommy.”
‘Simon(,) listened carefully, for he had the sharpest ears.’ (don’t need that comma)
Otherwise, great job, and congratulations on that 2nd place ribbon!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Shade, andonce again, welcome to WdC!

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