Wow! This must have taken some time to write with you trying to figure out the rhymes and research the story. I'm guessing this is based off of an Egyptian myth, correct? Or did you make it all up?

There wasn't a very good flow to this poem because the meter count kept changing, but your rhymes were really quite clever. You did a good job of choosing rhymes that made sense in the story and moved the poem along. The only one I had a problem with was this one:

...In the beginning there was the union of Nut and Ra
Nut's heart belonged to another, she was asked, “Pour quois?”...

I liked it because it is insanely clever. You just spelled Pourquoi wrong. Great job on this!

Write on!

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