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A sharp lesson  (E) Kinda a gender-reversed version of "Goodbye Violet", with some of my own take. #1970960 by Gurglesound

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General Impressions Interesting take on the blueberry scene. Very nicely done. I loved the movie and my kids did as well i was forced to watch it a lot. I still like it and you did a great job of bring that scene alive today.

Favorite Parts Personally, I'd much rather die than endure this kind of public humiliation... Vince thought to himself. But it serves you right! I liked the way you worded and emphasized it. Very nicely done.

Plot I like the irony in the title and your description match as well as the body of the story. You followed the plot correctly. I did enjoy the way you twisted a few things to make it work better.

Characters You did a great job on your characters. You gave us enough description to let us make the person come alive. I didn't notice over description on them at all. I did like some of inner tension on some of the characters as they interacted with each other.

Setting You set up the stage quite well I had no problem remembering that room in the movie you did an awesome job of description. I found no over description on any of it.

Dialog You made great use of the dialog to bring your story to life as well as advance the plot. "You think I'm stupid enough to believe that? I'm not missing out on this rare opportunity, and I'm NOT afraid of any of your small mishaps." Idiots! Side-effects on these kinda things never affect anyone, anyway. I picked this one because it is a good example of what I said earlier.

If there was any grammar errors or miss spelling I couldn't find them and I did read it through more then once. It flowed well and nothing jumped out to me as wrong. I gave it a five star rating you did a great job on it.

Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story Whatever another person says -- especially me -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.

Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece. Please keep on writing more things just like this!







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