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Hi MOM I love you  (E) Answer to my wife's question, "do I still love her." #1970401 by Robert

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General Impressions I thank you for sharing that love filled letter to your wife. I seem to be on an emotional joy ride today. I just reviewed a poem that stirred up the sad memories of my fist wife and our divorce and the death of my mother since they happened closely together. As I explained to the other author you never know what your work does to other people until they review it and tell you. Don't be upset because my mothers death was a god send. She was already dead but the hospital refused to let her body die. And as for my divorce three months later I got all four kids. Getting those four kids was the best thing that ever happened to me! I remarried and feel the same way you do about my second wife.

Favorite Parts At that moment I looked into the magic of your eyes and I promise that I love you now and I always will, TODAY, TOMORROW AND BEYOND. I know most of us husbands feel this deeply about our wives. We just get so used to the day to day routine we forget to show them where our heart of hearts really is.

Errors Please allow me to show you this. Your title and the start of your letter do not match your description. When a reader or reviewer first look at it we see "Mom" at first glance at deciding to read this. The use of "Mom" I know is your special term for her. To be honest I call my wife mom as well since we have a lot of kids together. But it also confuses the reader at first glance I thought this was your real mother you were writing to until I got to the middle parts oops. Remember your audience the childless married couples or single people will associate "mom" with mother. My only suggestion to stop the reader confusion would be use her real first name in place of mom in the title and at the letter start. There is no other errors to even worry about. I didn't notice any that stand out or any bad grammar or miss spellings. I still rate this as an excellent work from the heart. I gave it five stars and I thank you so very much for sharing it with us.


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Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece. Please keep on writing more things just like this!







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