Hi there blueknights! "Gasp!" your being reviewed by a newbie! I am reviewing

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Personal Impression I feel for you I truly do understand this poem. Having been divorced once I know exactly what this poem is trying to get across. You never really get over the loss of a loved one. Time does lessen the pain but it still doesn't stop it. my favorite parts are:
All the things I need to say
All the things I want you to know
Maybe if I just tried to talk to you
But I know you don't want me to

Tone & Mood I felt the tone of the loss you are telling about this would put anyone who has felt this kind of loss in a sad mood. I like the way you portray the way you can never go back and tell her the loos your feeling.

Rhyme, Form & Flow This free style so it doesn't rhyme. It does use a form I know what it is but I'm having a duh moment so I don't remember it off the top of my head. Your doing it correctly as far as I can tell. You poem does flow well you did a good job on the wording.

Emotional Impact Oh yes very emotional impact. I really didn't need that flash back but then how would you know the impact your work has on others until we review it and tell you. It brought back the sadness of my 13 years of marriage the divorce and the death of my mother and the loss of my four children from that divorce. That year was a bad year for me. But don't let my bad memories spoil your day. The upside to it all was Mom had to die, she was a vegetable it was for the best. Three months later my ex-wife dumped all the kids on me. The best thing to ever happen to me!

Grammar/Punctuation

I pried and tried.
I looked far and wide.
Alas no bad grammar,
Could this Grammar Nazi find! (Please excuse my poor attempt at humor but it is true!)


Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your poem Whatever another person says -- especially me -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion You are the only one who can decide what is right for your poetry.

Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece. Please keep on writing more things just like this!






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