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Review of Color of Hope  
Review by Fi
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Earth* Hi lmmortal Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  with your poem "Invalid Item" 

I love the spacious, drifting mood of this poem. It's sunny and contented, and your descriptions of nature are so...natural. :-[ At the same time you entwine words of love and companionship into the lines, painting the colours of the world. Friendship is what life is about.

Words like "sunbeam", "emerald", "tropical", "fusion" and "auburn" create a beautiful atmosphere. I can see you have chosen your words carefully, and I love how you have melted them altogether into a river of prose.

The free form suits the poem and although you have your toe on the line with 38 lines *Laugh*, the length doesn't detract from the whole. Like I said before, it gives it an expansive air.

I have only one small suggestion: I confess is the same as hope. *Right* To make this line grammatically correct, replace "is" with "it's" (or "it is").

My favourite lines are:
Dancing on the edge
Of my aching chest.

and

When twilight prevails,
Deep fusion of...

My favourite stanza is the last, with

Come, O' beloved!
Let me show you
The colors of the world.

Those lines give me the (good) shivers. *Smile* Very sweet, pacific and lasting.

The closing lines bring the poem to a satisfying end, with warmth, peace and hope. The reader is left with these emotions settled in the heart. It is one of those poems that breeze through you like fresh air, like spring and summer to the mind.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. It has been a pleasure to read and review. Best of luck in the contest! :-[ Write on. *Quill*

*Peace2* Fi

*Starb* WRITE ON! *Starb*
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