Dear Bonnie

My name is Vicky. To honour your WDC Anniversary I will be doing a Showering Acts of Joy Member to Member Review on The Victims.
This was a very interesting story. Jealousy, revenge and accidental murder all wrapped up into a nice package.

Your story was very well written. It flowed nicely and at no time did my attention wonder.

What interested me was the fact that your protagonist did not confront his wife. This came across as being very unreal. I would have thought that he would have first confronted Isabel before the lover.

You paint your protagonist very well. We learn that he is ultimately a good man. A loving father and husband and I did have to wonder why his wife would cheat on him. You cleverly justify this with the 15 year age difference.

One little problem that I picked up was that you used the wrong name for Cassie:

They had ended up taking Callie to the emergency room the night before

I am very curious about what Isabel said to Grieg in the message that the police found.

The picture painted of Grieg does not endear him to the reader, the only person that seems upset about his murder is Isabel.

Isabel remains untouched by the whole affair. All the blame is heaped at Griegs door. She shows no remorse even when she realizes that she has been discovered. She is more worried about Grieg than the fact that her husband knows and risks jail.

The ending was strange. I am assuming that it was the stress, bringing on a stroke that caused the protagonist to die. This was rather disappointing after you have built up the tension wonderfully.

This was an entertaining read and you have definitely explored the darker side of the human mind.

Thank you very much for posting this story. I will definitely take a look at your portfolio again in future.

Congratulations on your anniversary and please keep writing!!!!