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![]() | ETERNALLY YOURS ![]() A letter to the man of my dreams ![]() |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi ~WhoMe???~ ![]() I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! ![]() ![]() ![]() You are one of the showerees listed in the "Showering Acts of Joy Garden" ![]() ![]() While I was roaming through your portfolio, I saw this piece. Being the hopeless romantic that I am, your title and brief description caught my attention. How could I resist reading, rating and reviewing this item? ![]() ![]() Love, devotion, destiny - this poem has it all! ![]() ![]() When I think of romantic poetry, I think of rhythmic, almost lyrical, pieces that flow seamlessly and effortlessly. Traditional (rhyming) poetry has that and so much more. The harmonious aspect of this poetic form enhance the tender feelings and romanticism it has to offer. ![]() Your rhythm, meter and rhyme are outstanding. You have certainly mastered the art of Traditional poetry. Excellent job! ![]() ![]() I have just a few things that I would like to point out here. ![]() ![]() To affect something is to change or influence it, to effect something is a rather formal way of saying `to make it happen'. Confusingly, because either may produce an 'effect' or result this is a common error. I believe in your line, you meant to say, "it affects all we do", where "affects" would mean 'to influence' or 'to inspire'. ![]() ![]() ![]() I mean no offense by anything I have noted above. As a writer and reviewer yourself, you know that these are given with the best intentions. ![]() "Time was the element, to package it all, as my heart met with yours, and we answered the call." I adore the imagery throughout your lovely poem, but this stanza is my favorite. This is the pivotal turning point in your piece. The reader knows that you have found the one that you are meant to be with forever. The very definition of a soulmate is the soul's recognition of its counterpoint in another. You have portrayed this well throughout the entire poem. ![]() ![]() Other than what I have noted above, there is nothing else I could possibly suggest. It's a beautiful, heartfelt piece. ![]() I hope you have shared this poem with your fiancé because it is an extraordinary piece. I wish you both a lifetime of happiness and the best of luck with your wedding! ![]() Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! ![]() NOTE: Please remember that the above comments and suggestions are only one person's opinion. Take what you can use but never be shy about discarding what you cannot. Most important of all, keep writing, improving, and contributing to our wonderful community! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" ![]() ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Please visit my guestbook. Stop in, say hi, let me know if you liked a particular review and/or ask me to review another item or re-review something you've updated.
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