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Rated: E · Draft · Action/Adventure · #1684123
I will continue writing this out as a book depending on the response I get from you.
(A portion from Chapter 1: There's No Such Thing As "Happily Ever After" of Alice In Wonderland: Part Deux. Written by myself.)


Years after Alice came to Wonderland, things were going great for the citizens. That is, until today.  This is the day a new evil arises, even more powerful and evil than the Red Queen.

I stumbled down that infernal rabbit hole, and found the being who is now my partner, an unnaturally large dog with red and black wings. He is apparently also partially phoenix because he is occasionally surrounded by flames. Now, back to what this new threat is. She calls herself “Nihasha”. The name itself means “devil”, so I found it fitting. She is a beautiful creature, I’ll admit, but her entire personality is that of the worst imaginable possibilities. She is a monster, along with her minions. That is why I came here. I am known as Raven and my partner is called Jacobi. My dreams led me to the hole and now I know why: I must help these people until their normal savior comes. However, it seems Nihasha has sealed the entrance into the rabbit hole after I slipped through.

I am now on Jacobi’s back, flying over Wonderland. I look down and see what looks to me to be a tea party.
“They look so happy, don’t they, master?”, Jacobi wondered out loud.
“Yes,” I sighed, “should we stop and alert them now, do you think?”
Jacobi thought for a moment. “I think it would be best. Maybe they can tell us where the leader of this land is.”, he replied. Then we plummeted down to the ground, and as we landed, flames surged around us. Jacobi was the occasional show off.
“No need to be so ostentatious, Jacobi. You are magnificent as it is.”, I whispered to him. Being a canine, he loved to be praised. I then noticed that the creatures at the table were staring at us intently. I jumped down onto the ground and walked over to the table. Their eyes followed my every move. I walked over to the most human-looking one at the table, a mad looking man wearing a hat.
“Allow me to introduce myself. I am Raven Kobold”, I said, bowing slightly.
“And I am Jacobi, her loyal servant”, the dog added. (He viewed me as superior to him, which is why he calls me “master”. However, I view him as my equal.)
“It’s a pleasure to meet you both. What brings you here? Would you like some tea?”, the man asked calmly.
“No, but thank you. There are more pressing issues at hand”, I told him...


(To find out what happens after this, you must give me good reviews. However, if you think it's not good or if it needs work, I appreciate constuctive criticism. Also, please realize that this is NOT supposed to be like the book or the movie. Tim Burton made the second part to the book with his great movie. I, myself, wondered what happened after Alice killed the Jabberwocky and Underland was "free". Then the quote "No more happily ever after" popped in my head, which led to the chapter title. I wasn't writing this seriously at first, but I think I want to go all the way with this and see where it goes. Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. Hopefully Mr. Carrol wouldn't be insulted my this...also, I apologize for spelling mistakes. I'm tired. Anyway, please rate and review. Thank you again.)
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