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A piece which could be calssifyed as either poetry or lyric."My heart bleeds tears" |
| (new-ish version) My heart bleeds tears... my soul been ripped apart...! my joy been lost like the ripples on a lake...! Theres no way to say my pain, no way... to put in words! No words to speak my pain, No way... My heart bleeds, my heart bleeds tears, dripping to a lake! Their ripples my joy lost, like the ripples on a lake... Each fallen tear drop, beating from my heart... Each fallen tear drop, leaking from my soul... My heart bleeds, still it crys, My soul been tattered from time and use... The lake waters rise as the tears flow steady, the joy swims away as the cruel fish in life. Myheart bleeds on, bleeding those stinging tears as the light, yes the light, goes out. (original version) My heart bleeds tears, my soul been ripped apart, my joy been lost like the ripples on a lake... Theres no way to say my pain... No way to express in words... My heart bleeds, my heart bleeds tears, dripping to a lake. Their ripples my joy lost, like the ripples on a lake... Each fallen tear drop beating from my heart... Each fallen tear drop leaking from my soul... My heart bleeds, my heart bleeds tears... NOTE TO READERS: I need someones opinion on which version is better, I was advised to basically lengthen it, to... continue on with my 'idea'.( I dont remember the exact way they put it lol.) So please, if you have an opion, let me know your thoughts on it, I'd really appriciate it. -Thanks |
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