Intro to Dialogue - Assignment Week 1

Good example of dialogue from chaptger 8 of Huckleberry Finn by Mark Twain

http://www.gutenberg.org/files/76/76-h/p2.htm#c8
The main dialog starts with this line
"It's good daylight. Le's get breakfast. Make up your camp fire good."

I think it's good dialog because you learn something about the two characters, so it's kind of showing vs. telling.

I still find some fault in this segment:
Losing track of who said what. -> 9 segments without saying who's talking (Jim or Huck). That's too many for me.
Large areas of unbroken dialogue. ->14 unbroken dialogue - again too many for me.
Using too much dialect. - except that Twain makes it work.


Poor examples of dialogue

On the Run - Rev 2.0  (13+) Scene with a couple on the run #1351118 by Avid Reader

Facing Charges Rev 2.0  (13+) Woman meets with attorney to discuss charges #1358384 by Avid Reader

It's my early attempt at dialog. I know it can use improvement but not sure how to do it. That's why I'm taking this course.

Only fault I can find from the lesson list:
All characters sound alike; remember everyone speaks in different ways.

I think I'm making 50 other errors so when you find those, add it to the list.