Dear Christyjo,
Sharing this personal reflection about your son is admirable and I have no doubt that you're a strong woman. Naming Cancer as a proper noun gives an emphasis on its heavy impact and pain.
Although there are a few grammar mistakes, the ultimate message is one-hundred percent clear.
Your piece was short and sweet. I also appreciate that your composition was self-explanatory, as a short story should be. But, even though the dialogue was pretty generous showcasing his internal attributes, directly describing Walter's appearance might have improved your writing in a comedic sense.
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