That was pretty neat. I never read a story poem by an author from this site. I thought it was well written and had a good flow. Keep up the great work.
Once upon a time there was a wood nymph that used to live in the forest. Every day, the wood nymph played with insects, sang with the birds, and talked with the trees. One day, she spotted a small dog hopping and dashing through the bushes at the edge of the forest. Because of that, she became curious and followed it around. Her wings were fast as a humming bird’s and she was small enough to cling to it unbeknownst to the galloping creature. Carefully, she crawled on the dog’s back and stopped right by its ear. Despite her magical skills to speak with all woodland creatures she could not get its attention. Suddenly, the wood nymph remembered her duties to the forest and convinced herself it was time to let go. Until finally, the dog stopped running it was abruptly lifted in the air. They were taken by a man to a quaint yellow house. The wood nymph was set on a new adventure.
I think this was well written and you've expressed yourself adequately. I was feeling overwhelmed reading all the small things pile on and on. From reading this and picking up on certain key details it leads me to believe that there is misplaced feelings towards your dog. You probably intended it that way and that was great in the manner you have written it. Even though you are not going into full detail of the issues surrounding you as the reader I can feel the frustration. You have conveyed many emotions through your writing. Good job.
I liked the poem I can feel the message you tried to convey. I can most definitely relate to your words because mothers are very special to each of us. The beginning it is modest and sincere and the ending it is heartfelt and hopeful. There's one word I would change in the following:
"What to get that special someone?" - Instead of "get" I would use "give" I think it gives it a warm feeling when reading it.
Overall, I thought it was a well rounded poem that carried a lot of emotion.
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