The descriptions are great what leads to a perfect imagination of what is exactly happening with all it surroundings and all. The story is perfectly written. I loved the vocabulary as you didn't repeat the same words all over again and I absolutely adored the way you write. Barely any mistakes (as good as I could see) and as professionally written as could be.
And what I also liked is the idea and the sense of the story because it can be related to any other life. It mustn't only happen to a buck. If you look at it from another perspective you can learn a lesson out of it "Don't fight too long over something or someone else would take it" LOVE IT!
The only mistake was that you wrote once here instead of her in the sentence which said "she had spotted Tamba and her large ears flickered…" Just so you can correct it!
Hend M.
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