This sounds to me like you are going through a hard time and can't find the light in your life. Yet it sounds like you want to take a chance on something but not sure where it will lead you. A storm has a way of coming through and taking away all the dirt and grime and leaves things cleansed to start anew.
I liked your poem. Maybe your poems do not make sense because you are confused and not sure which way your life is going.
Your views of love are interesting. You show the good and bad of love which is very true. You should not use "yr" in your poems. You should always use the full word. That way no one will think you can't spell (haha).
You did a good job although I do not believe that love creates jealousy. Insecurity creates jealousy in my opinion. We all see love in different ways and you expressed yours prettty well.
Writing is a great way to express yourself. Keep on writing!!
You said it was a gloomy day when you wrote this. It shows in the choice of words you used like dispair, no sun or moon will rise and the world is broken. You seem to be going through some kind of depression and hard times and feel that death may be easier than going through the hard times. I like the way you wrote it. You got your feelings down which is important in helping to work through them. On a sunny day your perspective will be much different.
Good job.
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