This was a very good poem, Sherri! It was beautiful! I take it that the street you mentioned is the street you live on? We live on 2201 48th Street East. Just one more little tid bit of info about me! Anyways, I loved this poem. Keep up the good work! Brandon.
Hello! Thank you for your entry! I am your guest judge for the contest! Thank you so much for this piece! It really touched me, and it was well written. God is amazing isn't He?! Great job! Once again, thank you for your entry! Brandon.
Thank you for your entry! I am your guest judge for the contest! I want to say that i completely sympathized with this piece, which is why I rated it a five! Life seems to get dreary at times and we just don't know when it will ever get better, and I go throught that at times, and so does my wife. It was well written and i really enjoyed it. Life does have rainbows! Good job! Brandon.
Hello! Thank you for your entry! I wanted to say that this is a very well written piece! I love the images you give in your words. It had a dreary and depressing theme to it, which I am getting the picture that you were implying that. It was good. Thank you again for your entry into the contest!
Brandon.
Hello! This was a great piece! Even though i am a man it hit right with me, because i am not very attractive in this world's standards. I am a tall, skinny guy and i don't have the big muscles, but it doesn't matter. I have worth on the inside. I have a good heart and that is all that matters. I don't need to look like Brad Pitt. You keep believing that too, okay? You are beautiful and don't let anybody tell you otherwise. Always, Brandon.
Good work on the piece. I really don't think i can make it Sherri! I am feeling really blue today, and i feel like i am the most worthless person on the planet. You know what, i am worthless. I feel burned out and when i write i feel like it isn't good enough. Sherri i love to write, it is my life, and the only friend that want reject me. I am trying to make it day by day. I have never felt so alone. Lately when i write i haven't been so happy. It gets so lonely, and my work isn't good enough. 5.0 Brandon.
Good morning to you from you're earth angel! Just kidding! I am not an earth angel! I wanted to say that as a writer, especially a struggling one, i found the poem to really be great and it really hit the nail on the head. When i write i don't have to be Brandon. I can create new worlds whether they are like you said, fantasy or reality. I am the creator, and sharing that with readers, and letting them into those new worlds to where they can experience the stories and the characters as if they were in the story, is what makes me tick, and is why i love doing so much. Great job, and always keep writing! Love in Christ, Brandon. 5.0
I feel the same way. This is a great piece. Continue excelling as a writer. I may even write a poem in dedication to you my friend, if that is alright with you? 5.0 Love in Christ,Brandon.
Yes this site is filled with great writers. You are among the best in my opinion. I would love for you to share with me you're technique and how you do it. After all you are a published author. I have a new item in my port. It may be full of mistakes, but give it a look anyway. You're brother in Christ. Love always, Brandon.
This is a great poem. I give it a 5.0. The thing is that it hit me that i am not sure of my salvation. Something just doesn't feel right. Pray for me if you don't mind. If i am bothering you too much, please let me know. I am very lonely here, so i tend to get a little needy. I have until October and then i want bother you anymore. I am going to do some reviewing today. You're friend always, Brandon.
I thought this was really beautiful and kind. You have a great gift for words. The way you pour you're heart out on paper is just uncanny. I have written a few poems in my time, and have learned quickly that i need to stick to fiction writing. I consider you an earth angel. If you ever need anything, don't hesitate. There is one more story in my portal that you have not reviewed. It is called, where the worm never dies. Whenever you get the chance, check it out. Love in Christ, Brandon. 5.0
Awesome dude! That story had me fooled the entire time. At first i was reading, and i thought to myself, this isn't a scary story at all. Then you throw that ending in there and it freaked me out! Very good dialogue and description. You did a good job in making the character like a real live person, rather than just a story character. Good job. This is a 5.0. I really didn't find anything wrong with it. It deserves a 5.0. Good dialogue, good character development, and great suspense. You kept me wanting to read more, and you hooked me until you reeled me in with the great ending. Nice work! You're friend, Brandon. I am sorry i didn't send you any gift points. You deserve them. I am trying to save up as many as i can so that i can participate more in WDC, like give out merit badges and so forth. I hope you will excuse me on this. Kindly, Brandon.
Very good story Gabriella! I see why you are considered a preferred author. You have real talent as well. Anybody can create a story about a madman killing his boss, but the way you set the scene in this story, and how you mention the man and being comfortably alone,not many people can do. I could really get into his being, because i could sympathize with him. Before i met my wife, i told myself that it was alright to be alone at the time, and that God would send me my princess, because i had alot of love to give. The character really hit home. This is a 5.0. I couldn't find anything wrong with it, seriously. The style of voice was great, the setting was to, and the character was a real person, and not just a dull, boring, and flat character.
Great message and work. Have 29 views of "The Man in the Fire" and only 4 ratings. I am worried a little here Sherri. This gives me reason to believe that my work is so bad that they either 1. didn't read the entire thing! or 2. It is so bad that they aren't man or woman enough to tell me. Every thing i have read from others, i have always rated. I have a new item in my portal. Kindly, Brandon.
Wow! That story really hit home. I have never been in a situation where i have forgotten my wife's birthday, nor has she ever forgotten mine. I know how hard it must have been for you, i am guessing that you are the character, correct me if i am wrong. I gave this a five because it was well written and deserving of it. Errors? At first i thought there might have been one. It was when he awoke and noticed her standing over him with a mean look,but he just gets up and makes a bagel without going into where he asks "what is wrong?" Then you showed how it wasn't necessary because asking that never worked. My mistake. Great job!
This was very useful to me. It has answered my questions of how to gain more exposure. I am trying to figure out how to get more seen, and this has helped me out alot. Thank you, Brandon.
Great job on the work! It was very moving and touching. It made me think of my paw paw who died of a sudden heart attack on April 16, 2004. I miss him so much! You are very gifted. I will see him in heaven one day, and you will be with her as well. Yes she is an angel now, and so are you. Great job!
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