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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thoughtful and timely.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Thought provoking but I disagree with the suppositions the manipulation is one of the strongest acts of evil and humans are put on this earth with no sole purpose or reason. In order, manipulation is an action not an outcome, self will run riot would be a better train of thought for clarity. People do have a clear reason to exist...Reproduce more people. That's what life does, makes more of itself. That too, could be better expanded upon...Maybe. Beyond these points, the stream of consciousness style adds an easy flavor to engage the mind. It also takes the age-old philosophical question of good and evil which can be passe, presents that in a not dull or dreary narrative. The subject matter may not be for everybody, anyone can appreciate this treatise. Job well done.
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Review of Sam Platte  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Not long enough. That from a man that really doesn't like westerns too much, but the title grabbed me. It has a classic air to it and the dialogue is authentic. This is a great lead into a work that if littered with a few twists would be great. When I say twist, think a really human drama that's timeless but one wouldn't expect in a western...But you know happened somewhere, sometime just because that's what travelling men have happen to them.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A bit dry at first but the ending is worth it.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Thought provoking, concise and to the point.
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Review of Shake  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
A bit dry but interesting in its potential.
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Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
It put a grin on my face.
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Review of Twisted Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Twisted, warped and beautiful. Brevity is the soul of wit and this nails it.
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Review of My Imagination  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is excellent.
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Review of The Morning After  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
First impression sounds like me several decades ago. Second impression is this might be better told from the second person point of view. The way I'd write it, me, not necessarily you would be fleshing it out with gritty details...'another dirty bus stop along this stupid never ending river of dried asphalt...And everywhere I go I see that son of bitch following me...He always lives in the mirror...' Something like that. However, that's how I'd do it. Keep working on it, it sounds like you have a great story to get off your chest.
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Thought provoking. Could be the spiritual basis for a short story if not straight out novella.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Wild story...Needs polished but worth the read.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Interesting work, a tad ungainly but interesting.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thought provoking, mostly if you're an old geezer like me. If you're not, read it anyhow and think.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Excellent. Excellently written, excellently presented, authentic as it gets.
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Review of The Food Chain  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Very conversational, worth the read.
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Review of God's Mistake  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Thought provokingly dark. Rich textures touch the human condition that only the lonely truly grasp.
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Review of Deepest Blue  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Worth reading. Worth saying.
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Review of Dark Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (2.0)
You have talent. However here's advice I got years ago and has served me well. Brevity is the soul of wit. Some of your lines are sheer pure brilliance and those get tripped by a stormy hearty in other lines. It just needs some spit and polish to shine.
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