not quite sure if you have ever read the old man and the sea but in a complicated way this piece reminds me of that classic.
maybe too large to compare to but I felt the same as I felt reading the classic again.
More intense than TOM&S but still simplistic.
very very well written and makes me feel like reading an updated master work.
I get what you're saying...I have heard a lot of this from motivational speakers that feed you the same sort of questions, but it's true. You alone control you.
T. Robbins says a little change every day etc. but the final choice is always, how good do you want to be...as apposed to your own vision of yourself.
And the more and longer you go on the more you will realize your own strength and perhaps also realize that you also give the same strength to the relationship
A nice little way to get the juices flowing again.
If your bigger project has this kind of deep thought I would really look forward to seeing it.
Thank you, complicated and refreshing at the same time
Sounds like the circle of life...try doing it as an adopted child.
Your beliefs are solely created by your experiences.
No matter how much you are told that there is no difference, there is.
All I can say to you now is be happy you have a chance to discover your alliances
This is my second response to you James...and you need to give yourself a break.
I also have a history I am not proud of that I thought would kill me.
Just hang on...it gets better...it always gets better just when you think it can't.
I think you will find what you are looking for when you stop looking...I guess you may have heard that before but there really is someone for everyone. You need to expand your comfort zone...
I can really relate to this story...I am a child of the seventies and have lived through second hand "free love" and the Hari Krishna thanks to the Beatles.
I went straight from a careless child to an executive reaching for the gold and never really grabbing it.
My life now is based on a calm mind, meditation and inflection. It always was the best way...I just lost my way.
Interesting, I was in bigtime until the last line which I didn't get.
part of something larger I guess.
I will say that I had a feeling of a lord of the rings style story and I am huge fan of long rambling stories with great characters and an interesting(long) story.
I am an old man and can only talk about my life experience.
Love is fleeting it's true.
When your are young hours are like days and weeks are like years.
The pain will subside...it takes longer of course but it will.
You need to be true to you...you are what matters. Love will come, perhaps forever, but for now be true to yourself first, love yourself first.
The ramblings of an old man that has loved, more than once.
Your pain is made very clear...nice work!
What I am about to say is a little negative but not meant that way. Your story is, in a word, "wordy"
I have been struggling for years to write a story and reading countless books on how to do so and one piece of advice that seems to stick with me is to simply state a fact. Not that something was like so much as the blatant statement.
I have the same affliction with words. In my work I am always the person employees come to for a flowery letter or concise words that cut to the quick, but I have discovered in the fast paced world of LOL and LMAO my words are often wasted.
I also noticed a little crossover between aliens and humans that muddied the waters a bit...first drat got me right away though. I would love to see where this story goes.
I loved the concept. A new world Charles Bronson perhaps?
I have so much to say...and maybe can't say anything.
Suicide is something I cannot, and never will never condone. I should preface this by saying that I am not an atheist, nor an agnostic but someone who has a great amount of questions.
I have a very strong opinion about religion...very strong.
I have also been holding back because I believe that I do not conform to the standards that religions impose on us.
I have been thinking about a piece regarding religion that I believe may make me instantly ostracized and believe it may be the most interesting opinion that I have as of this moment. Looking for a sparring partner if you're up to it...
I am sure this article will appeal to many of us on the site. We would all love to walk the plank and step knowingly into the abyss, but life has a way of catching up to us all. Deadlines to meet, diapers to buy. If you are fortunate enough to work your way up to steak once a week and your neighbour only has it twice a month then you also have a status change, which human nature does not give up easily. Enter Stanley Kubric.
I applaud your strength and hope you can do this thing...I suspect anyone on this site who reads this will as well.
For myself...I'm going to save you to my favorites and see how you do. Maybe you can inspire me.
One of the first words to come to mind when I read this was lofty. Your writing actually made be think of royalty. Didn't know exactly where you would finally drop the answer or exactly what it would be but in the end the answer was clear all along. Well read thank you.
Nice effort thank you.
I have recently experienced the death of two close family dogs and the wounds are still fresh so the idea of them flying gave me some comfort and reminded me that they will moving on to spend time with all of our missing loved ones.
My first review in a couple of days. I have been reading some really dark stuff trying to keep my end of the review process, I have started many stories lately that I never finished, because I was headed to a negative review and didn't see the need for that. I would also like to write more and I know how negative feedback can hurt.
Having read this poem completely I think it has given me a little hope to get back involved a little more. Being of Irish decent your piece caught me right away and it was a thoroughly enjoyable read...thank you for breaking my funk.
I have to say that I found myself disappointed not finding out what the surprise was and would be curios to see the next installment of the story. Everything I have read about writing says that writing dialogue is one of the hardest to do. Not just writing it but making it flow smoothly. As a reader you're not really supposed to notice that it is dialogue. I only noticed myself after I read the piece when I looked back on it to create this review. So well done.
It seemed to me you were describing my life with this work and it made me realize that most people struggle through life doing what is expected of them or the "right" and "mature" thing to do, completely forgetting or giving up on your own life and time.
I have referred to this concept as the curse of the modern man/woman.
I have come across people who do not seem to allow themselves to fall into this trap, and feel jealous of them, and also some that totally have lost themselves and don't even know it or see it. I think they are even more sad than those of us who can at least identify that there is even something missing.
I would have to agree with your view and it has always been said that only children are spoiled and I suppose that on the outside it may appear to be true. We all have or issues to deal with and this point of view is obviously from people that have many family interests to deal with. I find all the responses to this and all things is simply that as humans we all want what we don't have.
I myself was the youngest child in a family with six siblings and can say that I wished many times to be an only child, much like I am sure they did.
Thanks for making me think about it though.
A difficult moment, continuing still. the hurt in you're heart is apparent still.
To force change never will happen, you can't change what you believe is wrong, but perhaps you can become more accepting of others faults as well.
We all have faults, easy to see, please don't let them cripple me.
I love you too and have never met you, but I suspect we both do what we need to do.
Lots of thought in the rhyme I do see, following your heart as difficult as can be.
Continue with strength that we all can see. Please don't stop inspiring me.
I have never been poetic and have never been read, but I love the process and it comforts me to see what you've said.
Please continue to give me pause, from what I see, it's all for a great cause.
Itshard to reed this artickle and not crak a smile. everything you say so troo. we often get stories pick a part by the editors to mayk it more apeeling to the I. Thank you for giving me fud for thot and making me realize that the storty is at the hart of every book, not how nice the cover looks or how well we spell. long live spell check and editors and thank you for this slice of reality...
Coming from Montreal perhaps I can't appreciate what drought really is but this sure made me understand how it must feel...thank you
my first review as a newbie and I am inspired by your words and might lead me into a north Eastern response for you one day...
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