I completely agree a handwritten note says allot more than email, txt or even a phone call.
It means you took the time out of your day to write something. There is also a complication of finding a stamp.
Great job!
I feel like this story had a really positive feel, and I enjoyed reading it.
It painted allot of the beauty the can be found in God.
There were a couple of things that I thought could be a little better. But first consider the source. I am no "Jedi writing master" so if you disagree ignore me. You are probably right
This passage in the third paragraph confused me.
"Now another son became sick, and I could not live with the sorrow of losing another."
-I reread the passage multiple times and I could never find if this child died or just got really sick?
Other than that every thing looked good. I couldn't find any punctuation or spelling errors. Great job.
Wow, that's all I can say. This is amazing. I'm a new member and this is the best thing I have read so far. It is so creative. From the way you described the aliens social structures to the way you described humans. It was perfect. The only thing I saw. Was the word "learnt" I think it's supposed to be learned. Then again I'm probably wrong I'm not Jedi Master at writing, so feel free to ignore me. This piece rock can't wait to read more.
I like the creativity and narrative. I'm no writing master. You might want to try and be more descriptive. I think it would make your story even better. Also, paragraph structure would make your story telling allot more powerful. Good start. I liked the creativity.
I don't know fudge about poetry either, but it sounded like you put allot of your self into it. I liked it. It felt organic and original like you bothered to create something instead of borrowed. Good job
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