Jacob Tecumseh Orton's (the_cimmerian) Reviews

Jacob Tecumseh Orton

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#3664846

Review of Chapter 1- A Cure for Immortality

Review by Jacob Tecumseh Orton

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Sara I liked the story. The first 1000 words or so left me unsure of whether I would continue reading, but alas I did and do not regret having done so. The piece kind of had a Heavy Metal, I like that kind of space punk genre. I really enjoyed your character Athenais. You seem to have written her with a kind of underlying sexual tension that keeps her interesting. Ultimately you created a character and a plot that is intriguing and for that I commend you. Good work.

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#3657367

Review of Octopus Paradox

Review by Jacob Tecumseh Orton

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I enjoyed the poem if I didn't understand it completely. I especially enjoyed the last two lines. I liked the "brain of gold" and the imagery invoked by "creeping mold." I believe the poem is essentially about defeating death. I would like to know what your motivation was. Good job.

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#3657301

Review of City of Sand and Glass

Review by Jacob Tecumseh Orton

Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

I am not a big fan of this genre, but my opinion is not biased none the less. I enjoyed the imagery of the story, but did not get a good feel for the protagonist either by way of physical description or by way of who or what he represented. Why did the protagonist feel pity for the creature he killed in paragraph 4? I also was kind of confused by the ending. None the less the story was enjoyable and left the reader wanting to know more about the environment ect... Good work.

4

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#3655692

Review of Tempting the Devil

Review by Jacob Tecumseh Orton

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Nice and concise. Good to get a different perspective with this story.

5

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#3655681

Review of To Anya, With Love

Review by Jacob Tecumseh Orton

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Wow, very painful and emotive. Well written and well done, the font was slightly hard to read at the beginning of the story.

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#3654573

Review of September Newsletter

Review by Jacob Tecumseh Orton

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Word.

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#3654027

Review of Fade Away

Review by Jacob Tecumseh Orton

Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

I enjoyed your style, but the narrative developed a little bit slow as the character made his way through the train station. The over all feel of the piece was hard to appreciate, not knowing a little bit more about the protagonist. Perhaps describing a day in the life of the protagonist before the "fade" would have made the character more compelling. Would the protagonist have tried to reach out more to his family and loved ones? There are unanswered questions. Regardless, the read was enjoyable and kept me reading until the end. I like your narrative style, good work.