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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I feel like this is a good start, but you could flesh out the emotion. A lot of what you say is falling flat. How do these things make you feel? Why don't you love her any more? Do you think it's just because she's not perfect, or is it something else? Where did the chemistry go? Why could she release your inner self? Can you?
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