Ah...that was indeed unsettling haha but very well done. So I guess you know more than anyone, unless you're leaving it to people to guess. Was he actually burying someone alive or was he just going crazy? Mysterious, i really like this. Nice job!
Wow, that was really funny. I love the ghost jokes. Admittedly i saw the layout and thought "I'm probably not gonna get through more than half of this" then as I started reading it just got funnier and funnier. very nice stuff!
This is pretty funny, the only thing I kept imagining was some paranoid guy/girl who was heavily panicking about these creatures from another universe. Trying to devise plans and strategies to keep his/her spoons. Nice!
I actually liked the build up, but the last line didn't really hit home for me. "Snooty" is a pretty tight rhyme and it didn't really feel like it was the right word there. You definitely have a good feel for what you wanted to do. So that's a strong plus! keep it up!
I like the structure. the aabcc was kinda weird to read , but it was nice to read something different. I also love the content, its o so true. Hard to come across friends/people you can say that you "love" and when you do , theres just so much you want to do for them. Very nice, keep up the good work!
I understand how you can feel. I write a lot of songs myself, mostly love songs so I get these feelings. Clearly I don't know the melody or how it goes since I don't really have that in front of me haha but I like the lyrics and how it sounds. Very nice , keep it up!
Well written. Was actually kind of scary honestly, the beginning at least,really put that "fear of God" feel Into this poem. Being a Christian I do understand the emotion isn't meant to frighten but enlighten. Even for those who know God it is still hard to put aside what you want to do for what He wants you to do and we will have to answer for all those things. Overall, very well written. Will definitely make some people take a second look at the way they live.
Absolutely hilarious. Very nice. I didn't realize it was comedy for a second while reading it so the whole time I was just cringing thinking "I pray this isn't horror." great!
I can relate to this in a way, I know how that feels to have a close friend who is no longer a close friend anymore for whatever reason, it hurts. As far as the structure goes , I think this would better fit a monologue type piece considering there is no apparent rhyme scheme, but all of the emotion is still there. Overall pretty good though and very relatable for a lot of people I'm sure :)
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