Your reflection evokes strong memories for me about the time I used to visit the beach. It's my favorite place to be, but now I'm so far away. Yet there will always be something enduringly beautiful and special, just like your experience with the rocks in this setting. I love how you captured the setting and the activity all around you. There are so many contrasts here - the busyness of the beach and the quite solitude of your destination; then there's the softness of the ocean with the toughness of the rocks. When you come face to face with it, you provide a deeper and more intimate description of the rocks, something that can only be experienced face-to-face. Thank you for sharing your reflection and take me as the reader along with you through this text. Write on!
Your poem pulled on my heartstrings. It is a sentiment that I can relate to. I think the same can be said for mothers - ultimately as parents we want the best for our children and do our best to provide.
I really love the line "he lets us call him DAD and with that we feel safe" and it is repeated at the very end which wraps up the piece quite nicely.
The only thing I want to bring to your attention is the typo in the following sentence: "But he shows us love in how he (trys--->tries).
Should you decide to expand on this text, I think adding a few lines talking more about how he can't always be all of the things would exemplify and strengthen the love in how he tries. But otherwise, it is lovely as is.
Your poem contains beautiful imagery about the seasonal changes and their interplay with the living creatures and plants of our world. The imagery is also highly relevant and relatable as summer is certainly in its final days and we are inching towards the next season. I love how in this transition you capture a delightful promise of harvest - whether it be rain, gardens, and future grains. It is a lovely read. Thank you for sharing and write on!
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