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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story started good and became really good. Cool idea. At first I thought the incident in the warehouse was the end of the story, and I was like well that's intense and strange. Hmm. But of course the true payoff was everything after that. The first half of the story was written completely for the second. You handled the emotional intensity well, and I was feeling it as I was reading it, although it seemed like he loved the son about fifty times as much as he loved the wife. One question: Where did all the stuff come from? Chew on that one. Alright, that's all I got.
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