I love reading your poetry, It expresses your points well, and has a certain rhythm for them. This one in particular I enjoy, because it alludes to the death, the dark, and the questioning of completing his goal here. I will continue to read your stuff, thank you again.
This story, I see what you are trying to do. I could see it from the beginning. If that was your plan, than great. I mean no disrespect at all. There were issues with this story that made the flow of it difficult at times, mostly punctuation. Hey, I'm not an expert, just an amateur writer. The ending was known and did not give a real twist that left you waiting for more, or satisfied you. The whole progression based on this rabbit can be sympathized with Easter coming up, but, that is it. I don't mean to be rude at all.
I do like this piece here, its a little confusing as far as the resulting resolution goes. But, im thinking you may have made it that way on purpose. I think that she has delusions of her past, maybe regret, maybe hope. She knows death is near, and she is accepting of it. Though the end confuses me, is she lying down for her death, when they flood the place? are they even going to flood it? or is she delirious enough and thinks this is all going to happen? Maybe that is the point of the story. Or maybe in WAY off, let me know.
This was a great poem, my interpretation, I can feel the hurt, pain, love, honesty, that comes with beeing young. And beeing young, life moves very quick. But, as you state, in the end you still lived your life, and thus all of the trial and errors, you still won. becuase you experienced it. Thank you.
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