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Review by Braxton Cole Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi FORBES,

To begin, I really enjoyed this! It is very emotionally tugging and can definitely make the reader feel what you're feeling; it is very relatable. If I do have any negative comments, it would be grammar. I understand that this is an informal writing, judging by your uncapitalized "I"'s and starting of sentences with coordinating conjunctions (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so), which is fine, yet when you decide to bring a comma into the equation, you are almost initializing your use of proper punctuation and grammatical rules, from the first sentence, "I make mistakes, maybe more than most". I highly recommend that you begin capitalizing your I's and maybe even begin to say "I'm" or "I am" rather than "im". These are all very simple and a bit critical, but I am just trying to help make you better because I have faith in your writing!

P.S.

If this story is really what is going on in your life, please understand that you are a very unique individual and everyone suffers from these thoughts every now and again. Just understand, you are an amazing writer and that you should be more optimistic rather than pessimistic. Judging by the story you wrote, you are very intelligent and I recommend you hold on to that confidence rather than bringing yourself down such as within this story. I may be taking this too seriously, but I am just wanting to let you know.

Have a great evening and please continue writing!

Best wishes,

Braxton Cole
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