I rarely give 5's, but this piece seemed deserving of it. Not only is it heartwarming, it is also deals with the fact that some people may do some bad things, but they are good at heart. I loved how you used the little girl, as a sweet, innocent being, to prove your point. I think that the end was very fitting, and for your hard work, here is 50 GPs. :D I hope to read some more of your writing in the future.
Wow. All I can say is, wow. I really like it, and I realize that it was supposed to be short, but maybe you could elaborate on the first and second paragraphs...? It seems less descriptive than the rest of the short story. Also, you use thge words: 'I would sit' twice, and it seems a little reptitive. Anyways, it was overall a VERY good peice, but I give it a 4.0, as there is room for improvement.
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/soleiletlune
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.10 seconds at 3:00pm on Nov 16, 2024 via server WEBX2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
