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Review by simi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I agree on the content but I see as a poet you should be neutral but I see in your own words like deceit, petulant, afferent, full of tears your showing women weaker then there is no point why world calls women weaker sex.There are lot of affirmative things women have like strong(strong enough to give birth to a child), patience(to tolerate and run a family), hardworking(work life balance, cooking 3 times a day, 7 days a week is a task in itself) yet delicate and beautiful which you could have used in your poem.
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Review of Would I Fly  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Good try, I felt few places the sentences are incomplete just dumped in between out of nowhere like "I just need a alibi" for what? or why? should be mentioned else the intent is really clear.
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Review of DREAM GIRL  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice and beautifully described but I see few words do not belong there like "A budding rose fragrant", i feel fragrance is the word but to adhere to abcb format the former was used so only this I found little distorted.
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Review of Poet's Familiar  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Good, I liked it.I learnt a lot of new words, good vocabulary.Keep up the good work.
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Review of No Way, Jose  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Good, had similar experience could relate to it.Intent is clear though some sentences are childish, vocabulary is good.
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Review of Gifted with You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
The words used have really good weight but the sentences are clumsy so the in depth meaning you want to convey is not successful, I liked the last part of the poem maybe you should work more on presenting your ideas as you already have good vocabulary. If intent not conveyed no piece of work is useful.
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Review of Sneeze Etiquette  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
fun poem, though follows the rules of rhyme word Achoo is not in standard dictionary.It was fun reading it though.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
very good poem, better sentence formation could be done maybe it got little distorted to suffice the rhyming.Content gets full points.
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Review by simi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I guess there is spell mistake last line, message was good but intent was not clear maybe "stones" was not the word .I see it as poem to build moral values within irrespective of what you face from others.
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Review of A Hopeful Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Good play with the words but I feel the poem was focusing mainly on rhyming words than the intent, non christian readers will not be able to connect with the last stanza of the poem because it holds the prerequisite of being aware of Lord Jesus and his story of Resurrection but since I know the story it was a meaningful poem.
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