Good try, I felt few places the sentences are incomplete just dumped in between out of nowhere like "I just need a alibi" for what? or why? should be mentioned else the intent is really clear.
The words used have really good weight but the sentences are clumsy so the in depth meaning you want to convey is not successful, I liked the last part of the poem maybe you should work more on presenting your ideas as you already have good vocabulary. If intent not conveyed no piece of work is useful.
I guess there is spell mistake last line, message was good but intent was not clear maybe "stones" was not the word .I see it as poem to build moral values within irrespective of what you face from others.
Good play with the words but I feel the poem was focusing mainly on rhyming words than the intent, non christian readers will not be able to connect with the last stanza of the poem because it holds the prerequisite of being aware of Lord Jesus and his story of Resurrection but since I know the story it was a meaningful poem.
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