This is a beautiful love story. I like how you personally put your relationship into this. It makes it more relatable. To see that you're happy in your relationship warms my heart.
Your poem was great. it flowed very well. i loved your word choice, it works very well. my facorite line was " The vengence of whip torturing to death with a hateful heart." i would have loved if it was longer, and spaced out into stanzas with some more details. also you had ery good imagery, but i would like to have seen more.
This poem is really good. It really appeals to the individuals that done lost a(n) person in their life. Everyone has lost someone or will eventually lose someone in their life. This poem proves that no one will live forever. Everyone has to die and God does have to call his children home.
I really like the wording of this poem. Not saying it wasn't good but it was very hard to understand. I didn't understand the connection between the little boy and the sad and lustful woman. If the woman was sad than how could she be full of lust? "So transparent the little girl inside.." I really love that line but I don't really understand it at all. I'm sorry but this poem would really use a lot of work
I love this poem. I like how it tells the truth on what it it to start over. Some people do have to surrender their dreams not because they what to but because they have no other choice. I like how this poem puts in perspective that sometimes your dreams don't come true but that doesn't mean there impossible.
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