This was interesting. I would suggest reading over it again and pay particular attention to typos and grammatical errors. I noticed that there were some places with typos, places where you're missing punctuation and places where you've not spaced. Also, the very first sentence contains a comma splice, so be very careful of this. Overall, good job. It seems like you've got an interesting story going on here.
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