I think this is a very interesting story, as I am interested myself in vampires, werewolves, etc... I think you did great, except I believe you should pay more attention to your wording. In some places you didn't complete a word or two. Like "seen" in the second paragraph. Other than that, it is all good, compelling stuff.
Also when you make a break from one time period to another always double space. That is the industry standard.
This is my opinion, I only give reviews to be helpful, and I do hope it has helped you in some small way.
This was a riveting read for me! I truly enjoyed it. I found no mistakes, and you are a fantastic writer in my opinion. I do have a downfall; if I cannot find anything wrong with someone's writing, I cannot properly critique it I suppose. If I honestly thought there were any flaws or ways for you to improve, I would share that with you. But I see nothing of the sort. So to me it is perfect and I give you a 5.0!
I really enjoyed reading this work. I happen to like creepy places, and your poem says it all! The woods are a pretty creepy place at night. I noticed that you used periods instead of comma's a lot. I believe you should replace the periods with comma's after the words spooky and gloomy in the first verse, and after the word whispers in the second verse. I would leave the ending the same as you have it as it lends good effect. This is just my opinion.
The poem was well written. The grammar looked right. I didn't see any mistakes that would make the reader have to stop and reread again just to make sense of it. Overall, in my opinion, you are a good writer based on what I have read here.
Wow! This piece is very professionally done! I was engrossed in this story from the moment I began to read it and held within it until the end. I really can't give you any tips for improvement, as I didn't detect any grammatical errors. If there were any, your story was so engrossing, I just missed them. It was well written and well structured. Keep on writing and I hope you have novels out there somewhere that I can read.
Your writing is interesting but there are a few things you should work on. Make sure you check your spelling and grammar and form paragraphs. A paragraph is simply a group of sentences that are formed together and discuss one main subject. A paragraph consists of three main parts, a topic sentence, body sentences and the concluding sentence. Paragraphs make your writing easier to read and understand. Keep it up, it will get easier over time and as you learn new techniques!
Regards,
Sena Slaughter
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