\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/sairin8
Review Requests: OFF
13 Public Reviews Given
13 Total Reviews Given
Public Reviews
1
1
Review of Foghorn Leghorn  Open in new Window.
Review by SarahW Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Oh, this is fantastic. I love the extrapolation of the characters into our world. I'm assuming HIPPA regulations refer to health privacy in America? As a non-American, this is one point that may not necessarily come through, however, the context would be that it is an American "news" piece so would still work
2
2
Review of Reunion  Open in new Window.
Review by SarahW Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like the premise of this piece. I like the feel of the piece, but wonder if lengthening the final stanza would help to strengthen it. Maybe seven lines instead of five for emphasis. Alternatively, adding a line directly related to the theme of the third verse prior to "you've changed in almost everything"
3
3
Review by SarahW Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
There's a lot of beauty in this piece. Some of the lines don't fulfill the requirement for iambic pentameter though. Lines 3, 4, 12, and 13 have either too many or too few syllables. The third stanza often has the stress on the wrong syllable as well. It's definitely not an easy form of poetry, so it's pretty good considering
4
4
Review by SarahW Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)
This piece makes me curious to travel to Sri Lanka to see for myself. One key issue I note is the use of abbreviations, the ones used mean nothing to me as the reader. The other issue I note is that the article doesn't live up to its promise. The blurb hinted that it would describe your 13 days spent in Sri Lanka, but it ended up simply being mostly Wikipedia-style, factual information. For example, instead of talking about the climate for the year, you could include what the weather was like during the time you were there and whether or not it is typical
5
5
Review of Baby I'm a liar  Open in new Window.
Review by SarahW Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Very well written piece, especially given that it was for a competition that gives the prompt on the same day the entry is due. The flow of the piece does need work, however, and this may be achieved by expanding the piece into a longer story. I did enjoy it and would love to read an expanded version.
6
6
Review of Rockabee  Open in new Window.
Review by SarahW Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow! This is a beautiful piece of writing. The very first paragraph captured my attention. One thing though, what is the motive for the old man to send the person to the alder tree? This lack of motive is the one thing that weakens the, otherwise incredible, storyline
6 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 1 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/sairin8