Great job! I have one suggestion though-----you could've included a few of the minor characters.....or at least an option "other", because my favorite and second favorite aren't here cause they're relatively minor character, and I had to pick my third favorite.
(My favorite Lord of the Rings character is actually Faramir, and my second favorite is Eowyn)
Oh my gosh. This is beautiful. I was almost crying. And that poem...oh, everything about it was so wonderful! This Christine, this story of this girl who was in love with the phantom...it felt so real, so sad, so hauntingly beautiful. I mean, most phangirls nowadays like the phantom because he's "hot" (which doesn't make sense to me at all). But this...I've been trying to write romance since forever but however hard I try it seemed empty, unreal, but this is real. I mean, it felt real to me. It was beautiful. Thank you. Gosh, I'm breaking down.
OH MY GOSH THIS IS SCARY!!!! What happens next?????What???Do they die? Tha cliffie was a nice hit! You really had me going there, with the goosebumps and all. I didn't think this was going to end with happily ever after, but a cliffie! You have an amazing third-person style, and that gift scene was really sweet!
This is a nice poem. You've given it a suitable rhythme, and the situation you chose to write about is something a lot of people can relate to and sympathize with your main character. My only suggestion for improvement is that maybe you could improve your word choice a little.
This is creepy. I love the mood you gave for the setting. Your words flowed and some rhymed. Try not to use "gonna" too much in writing, okay? It took away, in my opinion, the haunting, creepy essence of the actual thing. This is wonderful, beautifully pieced together. thank you.
This is a lovely piece of writing! It is really, really creative to think of seasons as people, and to suggest that Winter liked Spring! This is amazingly tender and sweet you see, because everyone stereotypes that Winter is cold and bitter because of the weather itself. But you have shown a whole different side of Winter to your audiences as you drabble with his feelings and his troubles.
I love the way you worded this. Everything flowed smoothly, and sometimes you made it rhyme. This poem is sort of depressing, which is what makes it so hauntingly beautiful. You have it, every single detail, and it is so very sad. For those who have an overpowerful imagination, they can see what is going on, hear what is going on. You gave a beautiful performance on this writing. I could tell you put your heart and soul into it.
This is amazing. I love the style, the way it seemed to have been coming out from Meg Giry herself. I'm a Phantom of the Opera fan too, in fact, I'm kind of obsessed with it. Really, this is, by far, the best Leroux-style Meg I've read! You've simply captured her, her seeming odd-ness and story telling. I prefer Andrew Lloyd Webber Meg, but occasionally, if I feel up to the challenge, I write Leroux Meg too. Thank you, you've captured her and I've always loved to hear it from her point of view.
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