Haha! At first you introduced you were grumpy, then described grumpy people.And then you say that grumpy people have great wives, and then go back to your original state at first. And then say you are grumpy again, and then relate the peterson dude to the introduction, which is great! Just a casual question. Are you a christian? Because, you write like one from the past 3 stories I have read.
Haha! This is my second story I have read about you and its great! I like the par you said," I should be happy that dogs don’t have wings. If they did, I have no doubt that Chase would be spending his summers in Canada and his winters in Florida. When I call him, he'll reluctantly race back to me." You actually made people think and cherish what we have and not yearn for more. For example, People yearn for things and then they dont realize that they already have something good, and when reading your story, you made me realise that.that was great! You also made me think how, not only to cherish, but also to learn from things around us, even the most unimaginable items like maybe the toilet tissue or something.
Haha! That was hilarious. From the way you write, you make comedy writing look sooooo easy, when it actually isnt. That was great!
You say things right, yet compare it and turn it humorous in the end! It was great reading your story and keep it up! I can tell you are very good at this.
oh . . . at first i had no idea what you were talking about. It was great to keep the suspense of the reader, making that person want to read more. Good job, and continue writing. But you need to take note to describe Grief more, for example, was Grief standing still or was motioning her away or something?
Wow! That was a great story! At first I was quite surprised by the pirate, but then it seemed to flow nicely after that. It was such a great story. But, you should take not to describe the pirate. For example, a scar across his face, or, that his face was perfect, not like a pirate, or, an eye cover on hisleft or right eye... the reader will then feel more there, seeing the picture in their heads.
Wow! It won?That's great!I was a little confused but after that, it was easier to understand. It is great to know this story won an honorable mention. A beautiful story with a nice twist... good job, and the fact that suddenly Carol was arrested was funny for a while, but then it came clearer.
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