Hey, I'm new so I hope you'll take these comments in the good spirit with which they are meant. The positives; short and sweet, direct and to the point. A few tears to my eyes and a lump in my throat in empathy with your experience and in anticipation of the time I will have to experience something similar. The other stuff, there are a few words missing so it doesn't read as well as it could ('you are not whiner' - might benefit from the insertion of 'a') - but then, that could be me misreading, and the style you wrote it in (kind of like a diary entry). Anyhoo, overall I liked it. It forces you to think of the terrible things that happen to the ones you love, and challenges you to do something about it while there is still time.
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