This is a beautiful poem! It's so romantic. I can almost feel how you felt when you first heard her name. I love the last line especially. It shows that you'd rather be with her than anywhere else. I also love the line, 'feels like heaven on my lips.' I just love this poem. Good job!
This is a great poem. I love the rhyming. Are you talking about Santa Claus, or maybe some other creature? I really like the last line. It makes the poem creepy. You're probably not talking about Santa Claus, or if you are, you're talking about a darker version of Santa Claus. I love this poem. Good job!
This is a beautiful poem! The images are quite vivid. I love the lines, 'This light upon life's waves that crushed/Soul's soft caress of human ash.' I love the slant rhyme of crushed and ash, even if that wasn't what you were going for. For being a beautiful poem, it is sad too. If you know, what happened to her kids? I really enjoyed this poem. Good job!
I love the details in this piece! I love the part where you say, what's the point? I love the crisp fallen leaves and the tall corn rows. I wasn't expecting anything bad to happen at all. I definitely wasn't expecting the dog to die. Thank you for writing this. This was great!
I like this story a lot. You should add more! I'd love to read what you come up with. Tip: Make a paragraph whenever the time, place, topic, or person changes. For example; whenever someone speaks, start a new paragraph. Or at least have a paragraph break.
I love this story! This story should be turned into a book if you want to do that. This makes me want to know more. Please continue with this story. The mom warns her daughter and the dad encourages her. That sounds a lot like the difference between a mom and a dad.
This is a great story! I love that you chose to write a story from a t-rex's point of view. I like the line, "After all, they knew I like them to be my food someday but not today." Please write more from a dinosaur's point of view. Different dinosaurs, like triceratops or brontosaurus
This is a great poem! Is this about somebody falling in love with you or you falling in love with them? Why is your heart unbeating? Are you dead? I love the line, "A spirit at twilight" I also love the line, "Tethered by a bond both ethereal and taut."
This is a really good story. Why is love magic illegal? I mean, I can understand why it might be illegal, but I'd like to know why you wrote it like that.
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