I felt the warmth of the sun and saw the reflection of the tress's golden leaves. Fantastic, Ive read this this morning and whyle the sun rise is at my window and it realy made my day.
Thanks!!!
I find it amazaing how you can expres so much in a few lines, I can actually feel what the character is going through. Apart from that, I love the way each paragraph ends with
"I am being caught"
"Now I have begun"
"I lost my best friend"
You take the reader into those fases and realy works!!!
Great JOB, really love it!!!
I really would like to join the group, my name is ookami-shima, ookami stands for wolf in japanese, i love fantasy novels with a twist of darkness and a dash of humor. But apart from that im really into oriental culture, and my favorite animal is the Wolf.
Nice!!! Really enjoyed it, love the poetry of the last lines, real good. Im just starting to write my self, and looks like im screwed xD, any ways check out my
Mishima : The Mishima Scroll's
at my portafolio, its not much but its a good black humour and mixed with normal day life.
Once again good read
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