It's impressive to see how much emotional scope you've covered such a short piece. There is a sense that James is in a lot of pain, and that this is expunged in a ritualistic physical punishment, that ironically gives him pleasure. Personally, I found the final sentence to be the most poignant, "these were the days he treasured most, and yet these were the same days he wished were no longer necessary."
Keeping the reasons for his predicament vague certainly worked in terms of stimulating this readers imagination. I found myself pondering why James needed this 'escape' Is it guilt that he is struggling with? Grief? Who has be become? Why is it so unbearable? Although no expert, it seemed to me that the serenity of the setting is effective as a backdrop for James' angst, in that it adds intensity to his isolation.
The test of a good read for me always comes down to whether I want to read more. In this case I'd love to find out the background and am very curious to discover what happens when James finally crawls exhausted from the boat.
Very enjoyable read and skillfully done. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Scallywag
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