Dear Peter Plum
Nicely done! But it seems more like a beginning to me or a soliloquy. I find myself wondering what will happen, next. Maybe a story about an interesting, odd person who doesn't sit well in society. Possibly someone so different they don't fit in anywhere!
I like poetic ideas that fit into s story. The story explains the poetry, the poetry reaches into the heart, the soul of the piece.
A piece about a one-inch high person, who is weirder than the rest of us - hard to be - who turns out to be an intellect and have common sense; common sense being the least common attribute in the people he meets. Yes, that would be interesting.
Regards
Niels Nielsen
Dear Peter Plum
And it sticks in your heart, that you get me more when we are apart.
True, so often true. The strongest apart is family and friends deceased. Particularly
parents; there is so much we would have liked to have asked them and said to them. You
find the essence of so much. Good effort.
Dear Peter Plum
Good fun, undemanding. Polly jumps while Peter sleeps, could be analog to many marriages in this day and age. Another good effort. Now, how about a short story.
Something about a man with a beard - a raconteur who talks more than he writes. Sounds
like a lot of authors, including myself. 4 and a half. Congratulations, keep at it!
Dear Peter Peach
Delightful! Don't know why Polly Peach become Polly Pen; is it an oops!
or did you mean it? Doesn't matter much, but writer's, the editor's say, 'Must be correct'. I don't care, as I said, the piece or the pair are pretty unpredictable. That
reminds me: a branch of the neighbors peach tree is hanging over our fence. Golden and
delicious they are - me thinks I will have one, now that is pretty predictable. Good
effort 4 and a half.
Dear Rosenthal
You have a vision of something quite special. I think I get the idea but it is not clear to me. Parts I can't make sense of. Isn't it the writer's dilemma; to be at a scene in our mind and the reader to only see words. Go there again if you like, walk around the sun, find some words that are different. They might be better!
One thing that is the most important: don't give it up! Even if you let the idea wait
a few months, your mind will find a way to make it better.
I like sunbeams, they come alone and touch the tip of my nose with sunburn. In the evening they stay talking to the leaves at the top of trees. Like children, they won't go to bed till they really have to. Keep writing, keep dreaming.
Dear Jay
I have just read 'I Have Confidence in Commas'. Very good! Extra very good!
In 1960 The Sound of Music came to my home town, Christchurch New Zealand, and played
for eighteen months before it was replaced. A year later it was screened again for a further twelve months. I saw it twenty times! Wonderful! Now, when I see it, I will
think of commas. You write very well, Please keep it up.
Dear Peter Plum
You write of how I believe many people feel! You reveal your feelings
well! Top marks for a well-crafted piece! Never stop writing and, sharing it with the world.
Dear Peter Plum
I find your poem very pleasant to read. There is something soothing about it. Like when I was a young lad and father explained something to me and I didn't understand, yet I felt safe in his voice and the way he said it!I say find your poem pleasant to read rather than found because I have read it several times. Tomorrow I will read it again. I know I will understand it better, but for now, I find I have a tear in my eye. I think, maybe, it is like the tear a father sheds when his child does something special. Congratulations on a fine effort. Keep writing, always keep writing. I give it a 5. Five of the best.
Kind regards
Niels Nielsen
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