This is a beautiful story about the homeless. I admire the main character in here for having the guts to try and do something to help someone else in need. Even if that person isn't asking.
I liked your language too, the tube, the tram, Where is all that coming from? Sounds sorta British or something.
Very well written!
This is good to Kevin, You know how to put your thoughts down on paper, again, check your spelling. Some day I know you are going to be a fantastic writer, and soccer player. I used to like to play basketball, but that was a long time ago, and only in gym class. I was terrible at though. I couldn't make a basket to save my soul. (smile) But I have a feeling that you are going to be just great. You have the will power. So keep on writing. and Good luck with soccer.
Kevin you did a great job in telling this story about Jesus. I congratulate you. I seen nothing wrong in your telling of the story. I did notice some misspelled words though, and that is ok, practise makes perfect. You should Capitalize the names of people. Like Jesus, God, Messiah, and Christmas and Easter. You did a great job on this for a 10 year old.
Keep the good work up, and by all means, keep writing.
I found your writing on Islam very informative, I am so glad you are sharing this, especially in this day and time. After reading your words, it makes me glad to be a Muslim also. God bless. and Thank-you
This is a wonderful item, I enjoyed reading it from beginning to end. Very informative. and truthful. I too, am a Muslim. Thanks for sharing that with all to see. You said this was written for a contest. Did you win?
This was a beautiful story, very well written, I am so sorry for your lost, and even though I don't know you, your writing touched me. There is a positive message in this story once you get pass the hurt and pain.
I am glad you won the contest for this writing.
This poem was very well said, very enlightening, and so full of the truth, I could tell you wrote from the heart. I seen no flaws or needed corrections. You write very well. I am still learning.
Have you had anything published before? I am in the beginning stages of doing just that with one of my stories for children.
Thanks for your comment on my very first piece on this web site. It always makes me feel good getting reviews.
Now I am going, to read some more of your stories.
Keep the good work up.
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