I really liked the line "Everybody knew a child born outdoors in the dead of winter stood as much chance as the snow of making it to summer." because, despite the fact that it talks about a dying baby, it seemed to strike my funny bone. The only suggestion I have is to explain more about why the baby should be named Nathan and what the Phoenix has to do with things. Overall I thought it was a pretty good piece.
I cried a little reading this poem because I'm going through the exact same thing right now. The poem flows well and emotion is almost intwined in the words.
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