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88 Public Reviews Given
102 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Casual. More my opinion than, say, most reviewers.
I'm good at...
Finding grammar and punctuation errors.
Favorite Genres
horror, fantasy, YA.
Public Reviews
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Review of Dragon Poll  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting poll. Probably to promote the Dragom Vale. Still a nice poll.
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Review of TSUNAMI!  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.

Structure: I tend to prefer poetry that rhymes only because I am so awe struck by those poets that can do other forms.


Subject matter: The sheer power of nature at its worse is a tsunami.


Overall impression: As I said, I am awed by how well this is written.



Notes: Please note that I do not give 5 star ratings. Nothing is ever perfect, but this is close.


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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically, I know what I like.

Structure: Is excellent. Very eye catching and appealing.


Subject matter: Short Shots is one of the premier contests here. It is very well put together and leaves little to question.


Overall impression: as I've said, eye appealing and well put together.


Notes: Please note that I believe nothing is ever perfect, thus the 4.5 stars. This is close to it though.

Bravo!!!!


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Review of Pooh vs. Yogi  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
You forgot at least one..... Paddington
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.

Structure: Beautiful. the color schemes and layout are really good.


Subject matter: The raffle fits everyone needs, just like the title says.


Overall impression: Its visually stunning and fills it's promises. I am impressed..


Notes: Here's a donation to your wonderful cause.


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Review of Death Unexpected  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.5)
I believe you can use the "product review" template under "create new item" for books as well. Just a suggestion....

You did a good job here. It is an intriguing review and makes me want to read the book to find out more. I think the run on sentences can be chopped up better.

All in all, a spectacular attempt.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
You should have a link toward the top that takes you directly to the forum. Your introduction is getting pretty long with the poetry and such.

Other than that, I adore this place. It is interesting and fun.
There are no grammatical errors or misspellings detected.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically, I know what I like.

Structure: is good. Listing goals is always a great way to gain perspective.


Subject matter: As said in structure. A tongue in cheek look at one's life.


Overall impression: It gave me a chuckle which isn't easy to do.


Notes: A lot of writer's struggle with similar feelings. Just know that you are not alone.


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Review of Hey, Listen.  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.

Structure: It's an interesting form for poetry. Rhyme and astatically. With the repeated verse it seems almost lyrics....


Subject matter: A little hard to follow but still very nice.


Overall impression: A great piece of work that you can see the effort put into it.


Notes: The "what're" in the third verse irks me somewhat. could just be me.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.

Structure: when you first look at it you think it is a poem. when you realize it is not the standard rhyming type, you are pleasantly surprised


Subject matter: How many of us are no longer willing to take a man at his word? This piece gives us hope that there might just be men worthy of it still out there.


Overall impression: A short choppy piece, but one definitely worth taking a look at.


Notes: There were no spelling or grammatical errors detected.


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Review of OI! DRAGON!  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Cute story. I would correct some of your grammar, but it fits your character's cadence. I like this story a lot. The way it is told makes it all the more entertaining. It may not fit everyone's tastes, but as I have said, I like it....

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Review of JUNE  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice acrostic and good definition.

One slight misplace that I see.... Your E line first word is not the start of the line. I would suggest moving it to Everyone and just delete "as we enter the final stages of the month". Just the opinion of a fellow poet (even though I don't write much of it anymore)

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Rated: E | (4.0)
An honest look at love from someone who was never taught how to.

Leaves me wondering if the author ever found that selflove that comes before any other kind. To be loved and accepted one must believe they are worthy of it. That is a personal step that no one can take for you.

I hope that you find contentment with yourself at the very least.


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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.0)
It is a beautiful page with tons of information. I would like to know how much xp my dragons have accumulated so far. Just a suggestion.
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Review of The Cave 2  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This one is turning out even better than the first! I love it!!!!
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Some of it is a bit confusing but if you hang in there long enough you will eventually get it. There is just a lot of stuff to take in.

I am honored to be a part of it and applaud Gervic for taking on such a massive undertaking.

I can't wait for my dragons to hatch!!!
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Review of Crash  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's a little bit choppy on the rhythm.

I find myself wondering about things, like if Johnny has a job and is his drinking affecting that as well. I see a hard boiled detective or a private eye. I also wonder how old Colby is and a few things about Susan.

You caught my interest but this needs to be more than a short story....

Just my opinions. Blessed Be.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This campfire is so much fun. I'm glad you started it for us.

How do you really review a campfire? It is more than one author with different styles of writing amongst them.

Still they are fun to participate in.
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Review of Shift  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
"up the legs of her pants and shirt" may sound better as up the legs of her pants to her shirt

"all he could find was a blanket smelling stale from cigarette smoke and body odor"

Those are the only suggestions I have. It's a good piece of flash fiction that could easily be expanded to a longer piece....

You caught my attention and left me wanting to know more....Bravo.
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Review of The Cave-Part 1  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
This campfire is so much fun. I can't wait to see what adventures we have next.

Campfires are meant to be fun and not worry about so much grammar and such.

I look forward to more shenanigans.
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Review of Make a Superhero  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting concept. I used to play D&D and the one from DC Comics, Heroes, I think. I also had my own RPG called Mansions.

Anyways, this is well thought out and creatively put together.

Bravo, my friend.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I feel like it is a typo in the title. If not, then it is a wonderful bit of attraction.

I love this piece. I am a fan of the dark and things that go bump.

Very,very nice.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Powerful love poem.

I especially like your use of the word "devour" at the end.....I had someone like this in my life but sadly she has passed on.....

A very strong sentiment.

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Review of The Weather King  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Such a great poem

You don't start thinking until more than half way through it that it could be about the groundhog. Then you have to go back and read it again....

Very nice.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
and their friendship grows by the day......

so cute. I'm glad I could help.
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