This is very emotional, I understand your pain as I too have experienced loosing a baby. You bring all the feelings back with your words. The simplicity of your poem makes it all the more powerful. There is nothing about this poem that I would change it is perfect, it is from your heart. Thank you for sharing it.
I love this poem, and yes I have felt like that on many occasion. It is really up lifting when people read your work and leave you a few words to say how it made them feel and if they liked it. Even if they tell you they would change it a little it still inspires you to write on take their suggestions on board. You should keep on and never give up, writing is a gift that not everyone has, its personal to you and as I said to my son there will always be people who like it and people who dont. I love this poem it speaks to me, and I hear your frustration.
This is such a heart felt poem I can relate to and understand where all those feelings come from, you relay it well to the reader. Thanks for sharing it.
I love word searches and I really enjoyed doing this one with all the spring time words it really brightened up my evening. Thank you for sharing it with us all. It wasn't too hard but enough to challenge my brain to think at the end of a long day.
Love this poem, it flows beautifully and the rhyming is smooth, it just rolls off the tongue beautifully. The subject is something that is close to my heart, I hate litter bugs it drives me nuts that people ruin the beauty of our world with their rubbish. They put their rubbish in the bin at home so why is it different when they're not at home. This should be made into a poster and posted round city's and town's for the people to read and feel ashamed for dropping their empty wrappers on the floor.
I really enjoyed reading this, its very descriptive and I like that. It reminds me of a dream and I feel the emotion of the piece. I actually like the shortness of it as it does come across as a dream and dreams are never finished, they just end abruptly, and we never actually get to know what they were about we have to make up our own circumstance. I think you have a tallent with your writing that will grow with you, keep it up and dont become discouraged if you cant always find your ending or begining, it will come at a time that is right for you, and it could be years after you started it.
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