Did you mean to say "It" in the start or was it suppose to be "I"? other then that it is well written and so true to many. I enjoyed it. It kind of made me giggle because so many times I walk into a room & think "Now what am I here for again" ten minutes to a hour later I remember. LOLOL but for many it is not funny and I get that. Your poem rings true depth. Good writing! :)
A very well written story. Very grabbing and kept me reading to the end. Very sensual and some mystery in it as well. I liked the thought of Amy not thinking she is the rebound girl but I keep thinking there is something more on her plate then she is telling. I hope there is more to this story. I would love to read more. You gave this story very vivid pictures that I could see as I was reading each word. Very good describing each person, each place and even the smell. I could smell it too. I like the twist with the red dress and the shopping bag that was good. I was not expecting that one. Great Job!
A very well written poem. Deeply thought out and touching. I can see the images you display in your words very clear and vivid in my mind as I read this. I think my fav. section of this was " From her branch she let out a cry
As a tear ran slowly from her eye
Off into the sky she flew
To escape the pain her spirit once knew"
To escape your spirits pain is to over come, well done.
That was the most out spoken and powerful point to me. I thought this was a great write!
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