This was a really touching story. So realistic and yet so very true in some cases. The ending was incredible, and it was what so many people would like to see as an ending. Justice and the good guy finally winning. There was only one grammar error I could find and that was "His team were playing on Saturday" it should be his team was playing on Saturday. A superb story non the less.
With how short this is you would never think by glancing at it that it is a short story. However, it does make a short story, that makes sense and is still simple but detailed. Awesome job.
This was really good and it was emotional even though it wasn't really long which I always give kudos for because writing isn't easy in the first place. The only thing I could say about this that is suggestive at all is, the ending seemed like it was hanging a little bit. Almost like it didn't end or there was more to it but great job still. :)
I really liked it. It wasn't a lengthy piece but it got the message conveyed. There is only one thing and it doesn't have anything to do with wording or anything along those lines. The only problem I see is that the writing is all pushed together, it should be in a line then another line type of format instead of looking like a letter. Awesome job!
These lyrics are incredible. I love them it's as simple as that. I did not see one thing wrong with this at all. The repeating parts I really enjoy. I love writing like that because I tend to use it myself as well. These are the type of lyrics I love to read awesome job on this. : )
I really enjoyed it a lot but I didn't quite understand the message you were trying to send. I like the way you wrote everything it's just such a short piece it's hard to place whether the author is talking about an event that happened or simply a moral. Either way it was a really good poem and I did enjoy reading it.
Surprisingly I really enjoyed reading this poem. That means something coming from me because I am not an incredibly religious person. I liked the rhyme scheme and the words you used. I like how at the end where you wrote "I'll faith it til I make it" that was a nice addition. Really, incredible job.
Awww. That was really sweet. It invoked incredible emotions. The way everything was worded great and I thought the ending was well worded. I noticed how everything had a certain flow to it and it didn't have any parts that didn't sound right, or sound like they didn't fit. Great job!
I can agree with that to an extent. Being married isn't always easy but even when u fight you are still in love. At times it might now seem like it but yeah sometimes marriage can feel like that. It's also short, sweet and to the point which I like. There's no use in beating around the bush. Nice.
Wow, really interesting story. I loved the way it was written in different views through out the story. The story itself was very good, I got confused here and there but once I re read and thought about it it made sense. Also, a great ending, but it was kind of sad....I really wanted them to be together. Keep up the good work!
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