Like it, love it. You should do more of it.
Seriously, never doubt your talent, only your sincerity. That's what you check.
Talent grows with the effort. Sincerity comes from believing in yourself and searching for the best - and most honest way - to express what's on the inside.
Poetry is our most evolutionary art form. Good poetry provokes images and emotions.
Your poem paints for me a portrait of a troubled soul trapped in an existence that he hates. There is no more finite prison.
Your work is concise, to the point. It isn't overly flowery, as some might think poetry as a medium of expression must be.
Search for the deeper meaning of what you have to express, and when you feel the emotion that you are trying to evoke in the reader, swing for the fence.
Continue to write confidently, a committed heart finds its genius. Be true to yourself and your work. Good writing is a journey, not a destination. With your sincerity, you will become better and better with each piece.
Words are our tools. Search them out. Define, redefine, compose meaning. Have a ball. I read a quote once that said, "Don't focus so much on writing in a grand fashion, so much as resolving to have a grand thing to say."
If w are true to your subject, our emotions and our words, we make magic.
I have an image in my mind of Zade. I'm an artist and I feel i can see him. There in the shadows, in the alley, leaning on the wall in the rain, his long hair creating his imagined bars across his angry, weeping face. His fingers clenched in the trademark half-open fist of anguish.
You should get someone to draw Zade. Could become the subject of a series of poems, a graphic novel, who knows.
The possibilities await. Write On!
cheers,
Robert
PS
My weakness is that, knowing me, I would have made it too long.
All the Best
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